Breaking free the history

Breaking Free - History part 1
Alright, guys I decided to make a history from the game XD
Try to enjoy at least, and give this a try!
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 A cool October breeze blew across workout ring *your name*'s 'long hair tousled in all directions.
She scarcely noticed. 
All her attention were aimed to the bay mare which galloped round her. Once she saw *horses' name* slow her pace, she gathered the rope and flogged it in the the ground near the Mare's hind section. 
"Get up!" 

she shrieked in a cheering notice. *horses' name* snorted and leaped forward again. 
Her hooves flung rhythmically against the moisten sand, as her muscles streamed beneath her sparkling hair mass.
*Your name* stood in the center of the circle and focused of moving so that the shoulders constantly pointed to the horse's shoulders. She saw the horse with intensity. 
Following another two rounds round the pen, *horses' name* decreased her left outer ear, as the ear tip  pointed towards you. Next she decreased her head and neck, her mouth opening and closing. You knew the signs. In its own language - a language of gestures and body expressions - indicated the mare as if she would join in.

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Breaking free - history part 2
Next she decreased her head and neck, her mouth opening and closing. You knew the signs. In its own language - a language of gestures and body expressions - indicated the mare as if she would join in.
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For less than a year ago  your mother had been in an accident that cost her her life,
you had to take over the running at the ranch.  
Your father has never met you, or, it felt like it.
He left when you were three years old and let your mother be left with the upbringing of two children * your name * and Emma. You hated him for that, and for that sake you weren't close to even want to meet him. Emma lived a very different place than you, she had moved from the small spacious ranch and to Los Angeles,  
she was in fact a successful business woman with a bones in her nose.  
But after the accident, she had come to help to get the ranch back on track.  
Together with your grandfather James.
Though Emma's plans about the ranch didn't amaze you, it rather annoyed you.
"*Your name*! Breakfast is ready, don't forget to feed the horses!"
A Old and fuzzy rather deep vioce rang over the ranch, 
you took the rope around *Horses name*'s neck and lead her out to her paddock.
Imagiane this is the breakfast

You ran in and kicked your shoes off as the hit the bench made of pine, when you came to the citchen you smelt bacon and eggs and freshly made cofee, a classic breakfast when James was in the mood.
You took a plate and started to dig in, everybody was silent, Emma and James looked at eachother with a slightly worry in their face. 

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PART 3

You took a plate and started to dig in, everybody was silent, Emma and James looked at eachother with a slightly worry in their face. 
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You saw from Emma to Jack repeatly before you broke the silence which laid over the kitchen "Tell me for god sake!". Emma turned her eyes down on her plate which she used her fork and nudged her food around. James sighed then opened his mouth "*your name*, we are starting to get low on money. And now that Christmas is around the corner there are not many who comes by here for help to their horses...." He paused. You shook your head then dropped your coffee cup on the table and ran outside. Your dads old competition horse stood with her head over the fence and looked at you, a mint which was laying in your pocket was a tempting treat for her. She nudged on your pocket with her lip, you stoked her forehead and smiled.

 
You took out the mint and gave it to Lolita, she was a light grey horse which was 20 years. She was the most valuable horse for your mother which made Lolita more valuable for you. Not because of your father. You sighed "It's never gonna be easy, Isn't it".

Lolita snorted, she always made you in better mood. You sighed then got into the stables to the fodder cans. How could they? Doubt on your capability to treat the horses like your mom did.
You were just about to throw the bucket on the ground, as you heard someone come down the stairs in the stable from the loft. The shadow came behind you and grabbed around your hips and drew his fingers through you dull and tousled hair. You immideatly smiled, it was Chris. He was a stablehand on the ranch but you & him somehow found love.
"You sleepyhead! You just missed a lovely breakfast." You smiled and pushed his belly playfull. "Ah, well then I'll eat some oats" He was just to grab a handful when you tackled him to the ground, then silence broke over you and Chris. You looked into his brown sprakling eyes. You lowered your head and your lips touched his softly.

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-sw